Bad news first -- or rather, con crit: Please learn the difference between 'loose' and 'lose'.
The second thing isn't con crit because it isn't a criticism at all. I remember in HP fandom there was this huge thing with being brit picked before posting a fic, and people were of two minds as to whether 'americanisms' were ok in a fic so long as they were in the narrative rather than any conversations, thoughts, etc. With this in mind, in the US we say 'he hadn't', never 'he'd not'. I never saw this in the dialogue, so it in no way impaired my enjoyment of the fic, but I wasn't sure if you're aware of it, s'all.
Third thing: what is hash in Britain, anyway? I tried to look it up, but just got definitions for the American usage, which is short for hashish.
Fourth thing: Ok, whew! The questions and con crit (which I hate giving. I feel like such a bitch correcting someone I don't even know) over, on with the praise! I can see why the concept grabbed you so hard, because it certainly kept me fascinated! I loved your balance between Dean, who remembers who he is but is still kinda nuts from the drugs and the place, and Sam, who just has no idea. I loved seeing their dynamic stay so similar to what it's always been, and that once they got back to the real world we the readers got to compare and contrast this with the boys' 'real' dynamic. Just... yeah, wow, I could go on about that for a while!
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The second thing isn't con crit because it isn't a criticism at all. I remember in HP fandom there was this huge thing with being brit picked before posting a fic, and people were of two minds as to whether 'americanisms' were ok in a fic so long as they were in the narrative rather than any conversations, thoughts, etc. With this in mind, in the US we say 'he hadn't', never 'he'd not'. I never saw this in the dialogue, so it in no way impaired my enjoyment of the fic, but I wasn't sure if you're aware of it, s'all.
Third thing: what is hash in Britain, anyway? I tried to look it up, but just got definitions for the American usage, which is short for hashish.
Fourth thing: Ok, whew! The questions and con crit (which I hate giving. I feel like such a bitch correcting someone I don't even know) over, on with the praise! I can see why the concept grabbed you so hard, because it certainly kept me fascinated! I loved your balance between Dean, who remembers who he is but is still kinda nuts from the drugs and the place, and Sam, who just has no idea. I loved seeing their dynamic stay so similar to what it's always been, and that once they got back to the real world we the readers got to compare and contrast this with the boys' 'real' dynamic. Just... yeah, wow, I could go on about that for a while!
Also, Greer fascinated me. He seemed really cool.