Of course the dates were relevant! When I studied the story, the synthesis of Christmas and Hanukkah was brilliant. Seven days, seven candles, heartbreaking.
I could see that the dates were crucial, because the sex scenes were limited. I counted on one hand, really, the ones you described, and all of them were impactful. And it surprised me, as well, because there's so much love there, the sex was secondary to that, an expression of it.
In 250,000 plus words and you have two, maybe three scenes of real, actual violence - the rest is described and is more creepy because you just know there's stuff Charlie's not even remembering. On purpose. That taught me a lot about what you leave out is as important as what you put in.
I learned SO much picking apart your story, you have NO idea.
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I could see that the dates were crucial, because the sex scenes were limited. I counted on one hand, really, the ones you described, and all of them were impactful. And it surprised me, as well, because there's so much love there, the sex was secondary to that, an expression of it.
In 250,000 plus words and you have two, maybe three scenes of real, actual violence - the rest is described and is more creepy because you just know there's stuff Charlie's not even remembering. On purpose. That taught me a lot about what you leave out is as important as what you put in.
I learned SO much picking apart your story, you have NO idea.
What does THREE mean??